I Am From
I am from a place where streets are loud and busy.
A place where every thing is quite query.
A place that is rarely ever silent.
A place where there is sometimes lots of violence.
A place where people fight day by day on the streets.
A place where some have no home and nothing to eat.
Where I am from we hear the sound bang, bang
from the guns of gangs.
Out on these streets sometimes you will hear the sound of fear.
You can see children walking around
crying in tears.
Oh how I wish I was from a place of silence where nobody lived in fear.
Where teens weren't dying of drug overdose
year after year.
A place where everyone gets along
and the sounds of sirens are not like songs.
A place where everyone has a home and food to eat.
A place where people don't have to think that their home is the street.
I am from a place that I wish could be tame. But for now everything will just have to remain the same.
I love the rhymes and I love how real it is and how you told your reality and how you want your reality to be
ReplyDeleteGood poem. So deep and true.
ReplyDeleteReally liked your rhymes you spitting bars
ReplyDeleteYour repetition was clever and your imagery was very good
ReplyDeleteI like how well your poem flowed together and the descriptions you put in your poem.
ReplyDeleteThis is so deep and true. I wish our world wasn't as hectic and violent as it is, but hopefully one day we can overcome this.
ReplyDeleteGood poem it really did describe Lorain.
ReplyDeleteOhhh mmmm ggggg ! That was so deep ! You went into great detail. And it is so true ! Good job girl !
ReplyDeleteI liked how you described how you wish where you were from would change, but you have no choice in that now and everything has to stay the same.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your poem. I like how you said a place where everyone gets along and the sounds of sirens are not like songs. Great job !
ReplyDeleteThat poem was very awe-inspiring. You can be able to tame this city. You can be the one to change this dangerous city and make it quiet and peaceful
ReplyDeleteYour right about that you we pin point exact on how I feel why do you need to be cool to be on the street and do drugs. People just want to become zombies.
ReplyDeleteI respect your comment because you took a different route and told the negative side of where your from which was unusual good job though I liked your train of thought.
ReplyDeleteSierra,
ReplyDeleteFantastic job! I really liked the last stanza that challenged your envrionment and provides hope for change!
I like how you said you wanted change but you really can't do anything about it and it's kinda true. I also liked how you described your situation. I especially like when you said the sounds of sirens are not like songs. Don't be lured into the song of the siren to do such things.
ReplyDeleteI wished a place like that exists too. Great poem.
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